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fredag 7 oktober 2011

A Date at Mac donald's

Percy is a guy with a twin they both live in Los Angeles. His twin is named Charles. One day Charles has speak with a girl and they disaded that they shoud go to mac donalds. But Charles and Percy decided to trick the girl that was called Elisabeath they said that Percy shoud go to Mac donald's. the saturday wen de meting was Percy walked to macdonalds. Percy dont saw the girl jet so his go to a table. Charles wanted to see it so he was on another table but his had a lot of clothes on so Elisabeath shoud not notice him. The Mac donald's bar was a bit ruffy and it didn't smell too good from the bathroom. after a short time elisabeath showed up. Percy got her atention so she go to Percys table. She started to talk about a lot of things like the weather or the sports and a lot other of stuff. Percy said that he shoud go and buy some burgers to them. When he come back with the burgers he took up he,s sellphone the girl look suprised and looked at the cell phone and said you didn't have thats phone before. Have you change ? Yes i have said Percy. but that was a little to fast and the girl sad you didnt have that scar before either . Then she look at Percy and said you not Charles you are his twin brother Percy . Why have you tricked me and then she saw Charles and she looked wery angry and ran away. Percy looked at Charles and said . that dont going to well. Percy and Charles newer again talk to Elispeth.

1 kommentar:

  1. An interesting text with many descriptions.

    You must check your spelling and the verb forms more carefully. You must write in the same tense (tidsform). Don' forget capital letters at the beginning of sentences and names.

    I've copied you text and made the corrections there but it' s difficult to see because the background is black. Ask if you don't see what !'ve written.

    SvaraRadera